The article talks on the order of words and how they effect meaning. There are basic rules and sentences that most people educated with some grammar wouldn’t make, such as:
“Johnny and Bill has his own bike.”
In our system of English, the words he, she, or they that have prepositions in front of them show their relationship by switching to the object form (him, her, or them). The author goes on to explain that one problem we have in grammar is when somebody says something like:
“You and me should go get some coffee.”
A lot of sticklers for grammar might be quick to correct the person who says this and demand they say:
“You and I should go get some coffee.”
J. D. Salinger had his character Holden Caulfield talk in a strange sort of manner that addresses this issue – Caulfield often saying things like: “I think I probably woke he and his wife up…”
Most editors find the following problems in writing: confusing word order, lack of clear signal by pronouns, and verbs that don’t signal the nouns they belong to.
An example of a word order signal choice given is: “When green, I love the woods most of all.” The problem with this sentence is that because of the word order, it isn’t clear on the meaning of the sentence. Does it mean that when I’m feeling sick I love the woods more than anything, or does it mean I really love the woods when they look green? The word order must be changed and thought upon to construct meaning here, as you can make two different meaning sentences with this – either:
“I love the woods when green most of all.”
Or
“I love the green woods most of all.”
The goal of a writer is to master their writing, which is usually done by having a hold of the rules of grammar to near perfection. However, like Salinger used his character Holden Caulfield to great success through his careful and deliberate choice of words, so can other writers. English writer William Hazlitt began a paragraph on an essay on Sir James Mackintosh with: “To consider him in the last point of view first. As a political partisan, he is rather the lecturer than the advocate.” True, the first sentence doesn’t really show who’s doing the considering, and it’s questionable as to how much of a sentence it really is, but it works.
The author gives another example from Hazlitt in how word order can be used to create more impactful sentences that defy traditional structure. He shows that Hazlitt wrote of Sir Walter Scott: “The old world is to him a crowded map; the new one a dull, hateful blank.” If this were rewritten in a traditional order, he would have made the less impactful “The old world is a crowded map to him; the new one a dull, hateful blank.” The way Hazlitt had it written, the “essential” words were put at the end of the sentence where they gathered power and achieved parallelism. Moving words out of the normal position, when used effectively, can surprise the reader in a good way.
The article sums up that writers need to gain an ear for regular and correct word order, because if they continue to scramble it, it’ll confuse the readers instead of surprise them, which is sometimes the writer’s goal that just doesn’t come out right. The author then recommends this strategy: repeat and vary – vary the normal pattern but only on occasion.
(by: Zach Solomon)